Tricky to pull off writing in the 3rd person, I'm impressed with the style. Last paragraph is a bit confusing (even after I'd worked out where we were in the timeline). Whole thing is kinda mean on Luna I guess but it would explain the long period between the end of the last book and when she gets married (and is away a long time).
> tonight, finally, she has relinquished control to another. She > doesn't have to lock herself down any more, and it feels good.
This is what I didn't think would work. Ginny being such a strong character but, credit where it's due, I think you pulled it off very well.
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branchandroot
Nicely done
Date: 2009-10-20 01:20 am (UTC)Tricky to pull off writing in the 3rd person, I'm impressed with the style. Last paragraph is a bit confusing (even after I'd worked out where we were in the timeline). Whole thing is kinda mean on Luna I guess but it would explain the long period between the end of the last book and when she gets married (and is away a long time).
> tonight, finally, she has relinquished control to another. She
> doesn't have to lock herself down any more, and it feels good.
This is what I didn't think would work. Ginny being such a strong character but, credit where it's due, I think you pulled it off very well.